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The Laws of Attraction: Part 24
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Repeating the words over and over like they were a spell and the more
Dana uttered them then the more they would be the absolute truth. That
Alice loved her and Alice wouldn’t leave her. And yet, Dana wouldn’t
let the blonde say those words herself. Part of her thought maybe it
was because the tennis player felt that if Alice said these words they
would become nothing more than a lie someday.
And that lie would hurt Dana far more than Alice actually leaving.
Simply because Alice never lied to Dana in the entire time that she had
known her. She had attempted it once or twice when it came to planning
surprises for the athlete and getting her a birthday present that Dana
wouldn’t find out about. But in the end, they were at best lies of the
harmless translucent variety that caused no real harm.
But the lie that Dana thought Alice would tell if she said those words?
It would surely cause harm. Not only harm but terrible destruction of
the emotional kind. This lie would rip her apart at the seams and leave
her empty inside and the athlete couldn’t bear to even contemplate it.
Which is why she never let Alice say those words.
The problem was those were the only words that Alice wanted to say
because they were the ones which could soothe Dana. Words that could
make her feel better once again, secure in the writer and their love
and how Alice did truly love her so very much. More than anyone else in
her short life and she couldn’t see herself without Dana anymore than
the tennis player could see life without Alice at her side.
Each and every time she tried to tell Dana this she would be cut off by
some inane babble about this TV show or that weather pattern or
sometimes she wouldn’t get babble. She would get the eager press of
soft lips against hers, sweet at first then demanding and desperate as
if Dana was tasting everything she could get of Alice before the blonde
was gone. And it was these kisses which affected the writer the most.
Why was Dana kissing her this way?
Why was Dana behaving as if Alice wanted to leave her? No, not even
that. Acting as if Alice didn’t have a choice in leaving her? That she
was destined to leave Dana and return to Gabby the moment that Gabby
snapped her fingers?
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wow got that tightenin feeling in my chest…
Sh!t… I wish IC would let you write for the show. I’m so sad, but you do write true too life. I can see two women loving Alice, fight Dana fight. Great as always, wish I could come up with something witty to type to let you know how much I enjoy your stories. Looking foward to next week and the week after, because you have me totally hooked on both stories. Deb
I hope that dana will fight for alice but I don’t know if she is that stong to fight when she thinks that she will lose alice I just hope that someone will get thought to the both of them and that they find find each other in the end I love this story please post soon
This is an outstanding story. I can understand where both Alice and Dana are coming from, though I identify with Dana more. Gabby was always the real threat to a relationship between Dana and Alice – though so many other fanfic writers seem to think it is Lara.
This is soooooo good. You are really talented. I’ll be waiting for the next update. Later
*blushes* typo…
*drinks
my god. this reminds me of some of the shit i’ve been through with relationships. except i don’t srink my sorrows away so much as lash out with apathy.
i love the way this is written. i always want more, and that doesn’t often happen with stories. especially stories with drama and tension so thick it’s like a london fog. they usually just lose their edge after a while. but this…well. you’re taking your time with the storyline, and that’s a sign of a good writer. a great writer, actually. i hate when people just throw down their ideas and expect people to understand what they’re trying to get across. it’s ridiculous and obnoxious and just bad form.
and why the hell do these kinds of situations always end up happening the same way? girl meets girl, girl falls in love with girl, there’s another girl, and then the scorned departs.
in both reality and fiction, this scenario sucks ass. why must humans be human?
come on alice, what was dana suppose to do slap gabby right then and there…nah shes too classy….let her heal and she will fight for you probably after she talks to shane, she has to get the strength from somewhere….good story im already counting down the days until the next one
angst angst angst – I must say though – as I read this I couldn’t help but think of Friedrich Nietzsche and of poor dana.
“I’m not upset that you lied to me, I’m upset that from now on I can’t believe you” – how true for her – no matter what you do to make this better between, won’t this always hang over Dana’s head? Can you ever truly recover from a betrayal like this? Won’t you always have the seed of doubt planted?
“Hope in reality is the worst of all evils, because it prolongs the torments of man”
Again – Nietzsche – cause you were so right with Dana’s reaction and need to shut down. If Alice could hurt her, she would forever doubt anyone else in her life and then the hope would only bring her sadness.
But I am a hopeless romantic and need to believe that you work your magic and make this better – so on that note – Publilius Syrus – an ancient roman author
“The wounds of love can only be healed by the one who made them.” So please – post soon and get alice there to talk to dana!!!! They need to make this better. She can’t go with Gabby! And dreiser – stop writing so well that you evoke such a strong response.
My god I LOVE this story!! It’s the best alice/dana story ive ever read! I wish you were a writer on the show!
I hope Dana fights for Alice!! Gabby sucks!
‘Fight! Fight! Fight!’ I HOPE Dana fight’s for Alice…cuz Gabby dun deserve her…Gabb’z a bitch!…Al&Dane – these 2-gurlz r soulmates.they deserve a long life of happiness&the impending doom of growing old together. PLEASE let Dana fight for their luv…Post s0On…