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The line begins to blur PT 10
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The line begins to blur PT 10
CH 20
Wish there was something real
Wish there was something true
Wish there was something real
in this world full of you………….
Motel 8.
I wake from the dream and she is gone. I knew this would happen. She didn’t want to answer any questions. She didn’t want to tell me anymore lies. I sit up in bed and look over to her side there’s a note.
You know we have to stop meeting like this. I have a million things to say to but I don’t know how. There is a part of me that is just for you. A part that no one will take. I wish…. I wish that I never met you. You effect my every thought. You made me feel again. What should have been a routine………………… forget me.
C
I should be use to her doing this. But it stung. Her words why did I let her in?……… No fucking way……………. I spent a year without her she wasn’t just gonna leave. I feel her pillow and it’s still sorta warm she couldn’t have left too long ago. I get dressed and head out leaving the key and a shouting attendant in my dash. I run to my bike and stop she is sitting on it, waiting.
“Hey…………” She says.
“I got your note.”
“Yeah my note………………”
“What ever it is you can tell me…………but I know you won’t. So how about you just tell me your favorite color and we call it a day.”
She looks at me then laughs, her laughs quickly turning to tears.
“It’s green. almost the color of your eyes… my favorite color………..We where in Mexico the last couple of months. Havoc had some things going and I went with him… I left because I love you and I shouldn’t………… Half the time I can’t even say it in my head. I never thought I would feel again since Helena and um…I am not very good at saying how I umm feel. When she died I said never again…and…um then I saw you. And …what makes it worse is that….um…we didn’t meet the way we should have. And I was so busy self destructing……… trying destroy myself that…I fell in with him…and his money and his life….and then I saw you…and I saw the way you where with Dana……… yeah…and I saw someone who was very giving……….but Helena dying only made me a taker…and lied and I lied and I lied and you still kept on giving……and you had this fucked up life…and you didn’t let it get you down….you just keep on ticking….and I didn’t want to………. umm I didn’t want to drag you in my life. ….you see your lucky…your not attached to this world…you don’t have things clinging to you….you think you do but you don’t. You could disappear………….and I want to go with you I do…but there are things that I have to do. And until they are done…”
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This is by far the best story I’ve ever read about this two characters. And believe, I’ve read lots of them.Congratulations to the author. I really loved how you fit the lyrics into the storyline. How everything was raw and real. Just like life is.Looking forward to read more of your work.
…Impresive, I loved it, and I too am looking forward to your future work…
This is easily one of the best stories on here. You did a great job of setting up an alternate universe for the story.
Shit!!! You wanna join me and make a movie out of this??? Hoho, it’s so much better than the fast and the furious…. God i really loved this story :D Write an other one please!
I’m with Shane,I was just thinking LAPD, surprised me with her being a FED. Carmen did say they could talk when this is all over (epilogue/sequal)… Thanks for writing this, I really enjoyed reading this!
^^yeah, I know, I just thought that since her mom lived in LA and she was out for revenge she was doing her own off duty thing… Reread the story, and I loved it more the second time!!
Been busy & had to catch up on the last few updates tonight. Damn! Your story rocked. It was like a damn t.v. mini – series. I’d like to think that they’ll meet up in the future after the dusts clears. Dana really came through for Shane. Glad neither Shane nor Carmen ended up dead. Incredible story, very cool how you placed these two characters in an alternate universe & they remained true to their characters. Excellent job. Thanx for the story. Think up some more plz. lol
Good Story! It ended the way it was suppossed to. Life is not all about happy endings and shit.
Absolutely fantastic…realistic… gripping. I loved every word. You deserve a few fanfic awards for that story.
That was a crazy addicting story you had going there. I’m really sad this is the end though ):
Simply great!
Loved this story, please write another one!
Absolutely amazing work. This was a great story that I am really sad to see end, I hope you will be back soon with some more wonderful writing. I like the real ending, even if it wasn’t the happiest, you wrote the story to be real, and you kept it that way. Excellent, excellent job.
Up until the last paragraph I thought it would end well. I thought they would let the dust settle then try it all over again–a new life without the burn of the hell that had once surrounded them. But then, that last line. God! Why? I guess it could have been worse; at least you decided to spare both of their lives. Either way, I loved this story; it WAS quite gritty. There was intrigue and realism in every word. You did an impeccable job at conveying Shane’s thoughts, fears, and feelings. Great job.
Fed makes more sense. She would be out of her jurisdiction in Bakersfield if she was LAPD.