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Previously:
“Make love to me.”
“Are you sure?”
“I promise you, I’m sure.”
She led me to her bedroom, squeezing my hand a little making sure to calm my nerves. There were no candles or rose petals and yet it was exactly how it was supposed to be. It was the moment that I would give myself to my soul mate.
Tina’s P.O.V.
I thought I would be more nervous, I had been a week ago. But I wasn’t, not in the least and that just made me all the more sure that now was the perfect time. We stood together at the end of her bed, the light was changing from late afternoon to early evening. It felt weird that I could see every part of her. In my mind we were always bathed in darkness, finding each other with our hands and mouths. But now that I could see her as she slowly removed her clothing, revealing her sculpted torso wrapped in black lace, I never wanted to take my eyes off of her. I wanted to see every part of her as well as touch and taste her.
She was looking at me expectantly, wanting to even out the clothing ratio slightly. I grasped the hem of my shirt lifting it over my head. When my head popped out I was flush with embarrassment. I don’t know why. She had seen me in a bikini which was just as revealing as the bra I was wearing right now. It was the context that was different. We weren’t just going to tease each other, playfully running hands along exposed skin with the pretense of tickling or wrestling, this time we would be touching deliberately. Trying to make each other shake and moan.
She reached for me then, not touching me really, just taking the edge of my jeans and pulling me towards her. I stopped just short of a full body embrace. She held my gaze as she unbuttoned my pants. I could feel her finger run the length of my seam as she lowered the zipper. I closed my eyes at the contact trying to concentrate on the tingling feeling radiating from my center.
“Open your eyes T.”
I struggled to, but managed to lift my lids.
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That was hot. WOW really need more. You need good grades also so study and then write.
What do you mean you’ve never been in this position before? Damn,those last couple of chapters are enough to set a person on fire. Your writing is so descriptive, and so emotional that you feel like your right there witnessing it. Fantastic job, keep it up, but not at the cost of your grades and school.
Even better than your other installment, which was wonderful
Even better than your other installment, which was wonderful
You think Bette got goosebumps..you should see me!! That was absolutely amazing!!Isn’t it time for school vacation yet?
very nice – that was almost as good as my first time :) don’t wait too long to post again – that was very great
OMG..that was fucking beautiful! I hope you continue to write many chapters. OK..gotta head to the shower…cold of course.
Muy Caliente! That’s was so steamin hot. I’m gonna go and take a cold shower and when i get back i hope to find the next chapter of this great tale.
Is it hot in here or is it just me? Wow!! I enjoy the intensity and emotion that you deliver. Excellent story. Who needs school when you write like this? Ok, ok, don’t drop out but I bet you could write your way out of anything. I’m just saying… (smile)
That was awesome, amazeing, and so beautifully written ive just read it twice and loved every word you”ve written looking forward to the next chapter… wouldnt mind Bettes POV…lol Im sure youd do it justice mmmmmm
oh god… bring it on… and you could make it last for ever…
Beautiful, poetic, lovely and……….HOT as HELL! Thanks!
Damn that was so fucking hot and sexy, love it. Bring it more please, thanks!
God, you really have a gift for depicting acurate feelings and sensations through both tender and passionate touches : what a beautiful, sensitive, exquisite palette !
Your writing is truly wonderful. All my sincere congratulations !
” “You are the most stunning thing I have ever seen in my life.” Coming for an art connoisseur, that’s one of the biggest compliments you could ever hope to receive.”
That line was great, by the way, I love it !
this is so sensual and overwhelming. thanks. read you soon.
Speaking as one the past judges I think if you get this out over 5 or more chapters this will most definately be a high contender for the next “Cold Shower Award”. Excellant writing, full of sensual emotions and tenderness.
Every so often, I read a new story…I simply don’t have time to keep up with them all. But last night, I had the pleasure of reading one of yours for the first time…part 1 of this story…and I was so taken in by your writing that I went back and read all your previous chapters too. Just fantastic. You have a lovely way with words, and I hope your stories continue for many more chapters. Thanks for taking the time to write.(But don’t fail out of school…)
OMG! This is soooooo gooooood and overwhelming!! Like looking at a piece of art that is just truly beautiful that it blew me away!! Hot… it sure is very very hot!! I’ve read your first chapter like 3 times… and this… wow… I don’t know how many times I’m gonna read it. Post more and soon…
Oh my GAWD!!! Why do I insist on reading all your people’s wonderful writing at work. That was unbelievably sensual and loveing. I can’t wait for the next chapter! Superlative writing.
Totally hot. You did a great job w/that.
I agree with all comments previously written!This scene is the most sensuous one I ever read until now. Hot!
Readers often want to be “put in the room” of the action, experiencing the emotions of the characters. If a writer is extremely gifted a reader is able to feel the emotions as if they themselves were the characters. You have accomplished this difficult task. I can’t wait to be both Bette and Tina…again and again and again.
k, i just choked on my toast. mother of god that was fucking nuclear. im giving myself a moment to calm down to write.
“but sitting here before her, allowed to touch and explore, my mind went into overdrive.” where the hell do you think mine went. well actually mine went nowhere. i couldnt think. as soon as you can, thanks.
fucking sensual and HOT!!!!!!
Whoa! that was so HOT great I Love it Please continue post soon Thanks!
HOT HOT HOT!!!! Bring on the next installment!!!!
oh my u r such a beautiful writer, pls continue….
School…schmule. Although I suppose there’s a certain amount of rudeness involved in asking you to flunk out to keep writing for our enjoyment.
And this chapter was much enjoyed. Please, what you can, when you can. The readers will be here.
That was fantastic – more please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!