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MYSTERY NEVER SOLVED part5
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(Carmen was on her prison lying on the bed)
Prison… let me tell you, not what I specked it to be .I have a room if you can call it that, to my self. I think it’s because they are going to kill me. So they are being nice. I’ve been here one week now. No visitors, and in two days I get, “The chair”…. The prisoners here don’t really bother me… they look at me like they know… they know I’m going to die very soon. I try to forget about Shane … forget that she turned me in… that she hasn’t visit me, not even ones…. But, I can’t. She is in every thought
“Carmen!!! You got a visitor” (the police man opened the gate)
Did I mention I got no visitors ?…well I was wrong, my lawyer comes every now and then, to tell me in other words, I am going to die and she cant do nothing about it. So yea everything is good.
(She got out and followed the man to a big room) This reminds me of my school’s lunch room. Lots of tables. (she sat where they told her to sit and a woman came in the room) told ya (the woman sat down)
“Hey how are you doing Carmen?”
“I’m good Beth, you?”
“I’m good”
“Any changes?”
“…. No…”
“Look Beth… ok, I don’t know why are you helping me… but you’ve helped enough… there is nothing you could do…”
“… They are going to kill you Carmen and I can’t do anything… how can you call that enough?”
“I’ve killed, Beth… you know that… I killed a police man… this is it… you know that”
“I do…”
“So are you going to tell me why are you helping me… I mean you just came here like my guardian angel. I can’t pay you in any way so… why?”
“Well… I’m not your guardian angel… Shane is”
“Shane…?”
“Yea, I know her and I told her I would help, so.”
“So she knows everything that’s going on?”
“Yea… she’s a mess”
“Why?… after all, SHE did this to me”
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ok i wasnt gonna leave a comment but since u asked and im a sucker i will, uhhhh wow speachless really it sux that it ended like that but really great writing and story your really good
ok you cant just leave me hanging like that.. please continue… shane cant be dead, please…. :(
Okay, I just gotta’ leave a comment . . . What the fuckin’ hell . . . You can’t just stop like that . . . Shane can’t be dead . . . Mane . . . that’s just not kool, I want a sequel like NOW!!! This is awesome, I’m just a lil’ upset dat you just stopped so abruptly . . . I could have a heart attack. You just hurry up and post somthing like now!!!. . . Whelp, like always from me, Baby-girl, LYLAS ;-p . . . Holla at me, chicka!
This is too funny! …woman with tape on her mouth…I can just picture Carmen snatching her from the inspection line and gagging her. Oh man my ribs hurt. Shane can’t be dead, I mean come on, I was laughing the whole time. Maybe she just shot her foot or something and then it’d be ten times funnier when she sees that Carmen is really not dead and she would’ve killed herself under false assumption. Oy vey, this is hilarious. You probably didn’t write it that way, but my sense of humor read it like that. Post more.
i’m gonna assume… that carmen’s knocking at the door. and the knocking surprised shane.. so her hand wavered… so while it still make a gun shot noise, it wasn’t actually aimed at her head anymore so…. SHANE LIVES!! say yes.
Ok, you can’t mean the end like, THE end?? No way…Having a nervous breakdown while waiting for the update…so soon please??
jajaja lol y wish i could see your faces
What the hell was that sound?! That better be Carmen banging on the door. That better not be a gunshot. Eso no te lo perdono, muchacha. Por poco y le das un infarto a esta pobre mujer. This cliffhanger is already driving me up the wall. And Carmen’s escape was ingenious! I love it! Keep up the awesome work.