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Masked Feelings CH 86 Giving of One’s Self
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Sharon barely looked up and then dove back into her suitcase, totally ignoring her question. She was taking her stuff out and piling everything on the bed.
Dana – What are you doing? Are you looking for something?
She was trying not to lose her cool, even though she had every right to. Dana would never be so ballsy to so through her things. It didn’t really matter… it’s not like she had anything to hide.
Sharon – I was trying to see what you brought so I could help you find something suitable for the funeral. Maybe we’ll find time to do some shopping later today.
Dana – I don’t need to shop. I already know what I’m going to wear.
Sharon – I’m almost afraid to ask.
Dana – Then don’t… honestly, mom… does it really matter what I wear?
Sharon was going to ignore this remark. She was digging through the pockets of her suitcase now. Her breath caught in her throat when she saw what she pulled out. It totally surprised her, causing her to almost cringe. Dana thought….. Oh fuck, the nipple clamps. She’d be embarassed at anyone that found these, but this really couldn’t be happening in front of her family. Sharon held it up in front of her.
Sharon – What is this?
Howie smirked.
Howie – Dana? Would you like me to field this one for you?
Dana glared at him.
Sharon – Dana?
Dana grabbed the chain from her hand, tossed it back into the suitcase and slammed down the top.
Dana – If you have to ask me what it is, then it’s really not going to make you happy if I give you an answer. Now can everyone just leave so I can get dressed. I can get ready a whole lot sooner alone. Can you please wait for me in your room? I shouldn’t be more than 15-20 minutes.
Irwin – Of course, we’ll wait for you. Just knock on our door when you’re ready.
He takes his wife by the arm and guides her to the door.
Irwin – That means you too, Howie.
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Alice didn’t sleep well. She wanted to call Dana to see how she was doing, but knowing her mother she probably had them all out of the motel hours ago. The time difference was two hours ahead where Dana was. She hoped that she was getting enough sleep. The dog growled on and off all night, then just stopped altogether. She called for him, but he wouldn’t come… not like he listened to her anyway. Alice was slow to get out of bed, but the cat was doing it’s best to hurry her along. It kept waving it’s ass in her face and the constant meowing was annoying the hell out of her.
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ARGH!!!!! Poor, poor Alice! After this, that f-cker better leave Dana alone, at least. I was worried when I realized he wasn’t wearing a condom and you have confirmed my fears. Damn. When there was someone with Dana I assumed it was her mother. Luckily I had just poured a glass of wine before I decided to check for new posts. I may have to start taking hard drugs. I wrote the rest of these comments as I was reading — before I was gobsmacked by the ending… Nipple clamps. Hee! Love Dana’s comeback, though. Crap. Once the dog stopped making noise I knew something bad was happening. Funerals can bring out either the best or worst in people. You wrote all that really well. What the heck happened to Sharon in that house? Creepy mystery flowers! Eek! Check them for cameras! Any chance of Tony and David in a steel cage death match? Another excellently written chapter, brteyes! If you were not such a good writer, I don’t think I could take this journey with you. The ending was hell, but, you warned us going in. I would say “PPS”, but, I think I need to recover from this one first.
Greetings brteyes, firstly, may I offer my deepest condolences on the passing of your grandmother. I am so sorry that I was not able to respond the last 2 posts because I was away. I hope by now you have found a way to come to terms with your loss. There is never really a good way to manage losing some one who was so close to you. In time, you will take comfort with fond memories of her. Back to this post, thank you for the warning. But I am afraid that it did not help. On top of it, I had a pretty bad hangover. I had to read it twice to make sure that I did not miss anything. OMFG, I am shocked beyond belief. The shock factor had shot off the scale. TONY MUST DIE!! With over 660 hits and only MaGoose dared to comment. Gee I wonder why. It was so hard to read that I stopped a couple of times. Tony must pay for violating both A and almost D. He made David looked like an angel (only this time). I cannot even imagine how A felt with the choice that she had to make. What a sick bastard!!!! Keeping a tube of lubricant in the car was disgusting. He was just an animal at best. Wait till David found out about this. I am sure there would be retribution for Tony. A should call Kristen for help and get to the hospital asap and get a D & C. There is no way that we readers can bear A having Tony’s offspring. For crying out loud, this was rape. I am not sure that A could bring herself to tell D what had happened. But keeping it a secret would eat her alive. I am so furious and yet, I still have a glimpse of hope that you will take care of them. Back to the beginning of the story, what is wrong with Sharon. Did something happened between her and Gracie? Not honoring Gracie to be cremated was wrong. The flower was from Lara, right? I also bet an eclair (that MaGoose was giving away from “The Island”) that David killed the dog. So that A would not have to babysit anymore and get back to D’s place and he could spy on them easier. Finally, it felt so creepy and scary as D was exploring the old house. brteyes, salute to you and your well written story. As upset as I am right now, I still can’t wait till your next post. I am so hooked on this story. Until then, take care!
WOW………….. I have a lot to talk about. Okay, at first, lemme say that the dead pet part reminded me of Alice’s scary story that she told in The L word season 5. You know the one that the dog’s dead and the killer is licking the hand? WOOOOOF… Scary- I really wonder what Sharon is holding back. What can it be that Sharon calls it a nightmare? I knew Dana was not gonna be safe at her garndma’s house. But I do hope that she finds out what’s bothering Sharon, and hopefully eases it out, or something. Dana must be really under stress. Woh, I can’t imagine how outrageous Dana will be when she finds out what Tony did to Alice. Yes, I didn’t notice that he wasn’t wearing condome, but after Magoose mentioned it, it hit me like a rock. So Tony is planning on having Alice as his whore….NO WAY!!!! Alice is only Dana’s whore….. tears, tears. So it’s unveiled that Alice was getting excited when he kissed her before. But Tony’s rape(?) seems more forced this time that Alice didn’t enjoy at all… Okay, I really really really hope that A doesn’t get pregnant. It’s going to SO COMPLICATED, if A is conceived. A and D just started to get back on their love track… Man… I wonder that the pet was killed by David. I may be just paranoid. And I’m suspecting that David sent some flowers to Dana. David and Lara are twins. They must share same traits! But back to Alice and Tony, I would have thought that dead Gina would hinder Tony from having Alice. Alice was Gina’s LOVE!! For god’s sake! Tony’s view for women, saying that all women are same, will surely hurt Alice. He’s just gonna use her till he gets tired of her. I can only hope Dana finds out about this–you know, maybe when Dana and Alice sleep together, Dana notices bruised lips or some forced marks. But you know what? Honestly… Even though Tony’s act was most despiseable thing, I understand him–not that I approve of it though. Dana even raped(?) Alice at the biggining of story, only that Alice enjoyed it. I guess guys tend to think that it they have bodies that they will have women’s herats. Ah, how wrong they are! And I can’t believe with 720 reading there are only two comments!! But what a great work! Don’t give up on us. We appreciate your work so much. Some of us are very shy, I guess. Keep on the hard striving!Your work is filled with wonders. I can’t seem to predict what will happen. And a lot of suspense with love….. This story is truly one of a kind. So don’t you give up on this:) Oh, forgot something! I’m sure that Tony is gloat in front of Roxy that he had Alice. And……….. I can only imagine how out of control Roxy will be! Peww…. ;) My hearty support to you :) Great story line ;) I hope to see you soon, but don’t get pressured. Thank ye, PPS. :)
OH MY FUCKING GOD! POOR ALICE :( I cant believe she being raped agen, cus tht wat it basically is! She saving Dana and going thru it herself :(. I so didnt see this ending coming and i am well to say the least shocked! I cant believe tht wanker is doing this. I was worried tht she wud get pregnant, thn it turns out tht wat Tony wants. Which means more trouble for Al and Dana cus she gunna find out, but will she find out the truth or will she jsut think Alice slept with Tony willingly??? ARGH i need to know lol. This whole chapter had me pretty creeped out with the dog growling, thn being dead. The flowers and the obviously before we found out why the figure in Dana’s grandmothers house. This chapter was defo worth the wait and i can not wait for the next chapter i reli cant, as bad as it may be :( Ur writing is to good to want to stop reading so im gunna try and recover from this chapter ready for the next lol. :) Brilliant writing agen. x
I’m officially shocked, brteyes! But on the other hand….how can I be shocked when I came so farwith reading this amazing story? To my biggest displeasure, the last part did turn me on a littlealthough it was totally disgusting and so fucking wrong. Tony needs to be executed as fast as possible.And this, my dear friend, is a mission possible. I believe that you’re going to make us readers happy.This last part made me feel so many negative things. I don’t know what I’d do being in Alice’s position,probably mutate to a killer and tear that motherfucker apart. I’d start with his fingers and end torturinghim between his hairy legs. Do you know what I mean? lol If not, questions are allowed. Please, let David or even Dana kill that monster. I would do it myself but I’m not involved in this story. What apity, lol. I’m sorry for commenting so late. My life is keeping me occupied….or should I say my otherhalf is keeping me busy? Hope you’re not all too disappointed with me now. I thought it was so funny when Sharon took outthese nipple clamps out of Dana’s suitcase asking what it was. I mean, my mom would surely ask methe same, lol. Maybe I should fill her in? What do you think? I wonder who killed that dog. Tony orDavid? David or Tony? Or maybe none of them? Could you give me an answer to this….please, please, pretty please? I don’t know why Sharon doesn’t want to respect Gracie’s last wish which was to be cremated. There must be a secret she’s keeping from Dana and her family. I’m looking forward to that part and I’m certain it’ll be fun for you to write. Stiff persons are suspicious in my eyes….and I’m counting Sharon as a very stiff person. I wish Dana would have listened to her mom when shetold her not to go to her grandma’s house. Of course, something bad had to happen to my lovely Dana. I suppose she won’t remember what happened in that night. Damn, there are so many questions I wouldlove to ask you about further events in this story but you won’t tell me:-(( It really drives me crazyto have all these different scenarios in my head and not knowing if they will happen the way I thinkor not. Mostly it’s the latter, lol. Alice’s and Dana’s relationship is kinda falling apart just because psychos and bastardos like Tony/David and Lara do exist in this fucked up universe. ButI believe in happy endings and I know we’ll get to read happy Danish eventually. Alice might keep it asecret that Tony raped her. Dana could never bear this information. The fact that this was the only wayAlice could rescue Dana and keep that bastard away from her would destroy her. Really don’t think, Dana’sstrong enough to hear about it. She would blame herself all the way through. Damn, I feel so much hatred and resentment when I think of Tony. Would like to see him being raped by a woman….preferably Roxy or evenLara. You actually revealed to us that she’s alive. Thanks to the flowers Dana received. Why doesn’tDavid know that she’s not dead then? Doesn’t Lara trust her own brother? What a big surprise, lol. Itruly truly truly hope that Al won’t get pregnant from this one “shot”. Tony shouldn’t have any spermsat all, lol. Now on to the questions you asked. Yes, I still want Dana…and I would like to playwith her….tennis of course, lol. My girlfriend wouldn’t approve of this just because she’s in lovewith her more than I could ever be. My goal is to hide Dana from my horny girlfriend, lol. I silldon’t know how I could possibly make it up to you. Any ideas? Well, I have something on my mind butI should think it through again. I’ll let you know the next time if this is alright with you. Until then, keep up this excellent writing and kill someone off. I really need to see someone die, lol. Thanks forthis superb chapter, darlin’. I’ll be waiting around the corner for your next ingenious coup…..
Oh, and I forgot to mention that it’s in his jeans. That’s what you were trying to tell me, right? Yeah, you mean his little Tony in his pants. I didn’t have the chance to meet him in person but I’m more than certain that I’d need a loupe to see something there. Post soon, hottie. And….you mean the world to me as well, darlin’!
I’ve been following this story for some time and applaud you for keeping it going. I do understand how hard that is, so thanks for writing. Since you would like comments I’ll add mine. I always jump back to this site hoping for an update on this story. I actually wish there hadn’t been. I’m for angst, cheating, lies and deceit and I know this story has always had a dark edge but I didn’t like this chapter. I’m pretty tired of seeing the women victimized so much. Especially the character of Alice, how many times is she going to be sexually abused by someone? Why are the men in this story so dispicable? For a while I was frustrated with David’s storyline, with his abuse of Roxie. That was nothing compared to Tony. I don’t care that much about Roxie being hurt but I couldn’t help but think how does this move the story forward. What is the point to showing David’s power over her. He’s no hero to Alice and Dana, he a sicko and I don’t understand what his point is besides Lara being alive. But back to this recent update. There were so many more interesting things that I’ve been waiting to see happen, interesting developments, but I wish I could just erase the memory of reading the ending to this. I honestly don’t know if I can hang in there with this story if Tony will still be around and this progresses into some kind of warped relationship. Let Alice find his gun and shoot him between the eyes.
Hey brteyes! It’s great to see you again;-) Well, you’re right. My girlfriend knows me pretty well, if not best. I do agree on that. She was also the one who called me Ladykiller once and I thought it should be my screen name on this site. Not that I am literally a Ladykiller, lol. That doesn’t imply it, not at all. Do you have a girlfriend or a boyfriend, brteyes?;-) Or are you single? It’s a personal question, and may I be forgiven, but this time I am curious. You don’t need to answer that one if you don’t feel like it. Even writers have their rights, lol. You can call me whatever you want, my dear. Even missy if that makes you happy, lol. I absolutely do not mind. One phrase about this chapter should be left in my comment. It was definitely one of your best pieces but my heart stopped beating at the last part. Please strangle Tony that piece of shit! Keep up this marvelous story. PPS brteyes;-) Pssss: I’ll try not to be that lazy, lol.
omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! im so shocked lol
wow sorry..that was a really good chapter..oh my god though wat alice did for dana god!! i hope she doesnt get pregnant!!..wat is she going to tell dana if she does..i hate that tony so much!!! Is dana gonna think she cheated on her how do u explain what just happened..things are gunna get so interesting…excellent chapter :)
Holy Balls! I actually read this chapter hours ago and I still don’t know how to respond to it. While I entirely commend the decision that Alice made, it still makes my blood boil to think that yet another person violated her and will fuck with her sense of trust. I’m hoping it won’t effect her decision to go to therapy, because she is going to need that more now than she ever has before. She does need to let Dana know what happened to her and what could have possibly happened if not for her choice. Dana might not be strong enough to her it, but has to understand that Roxy is not the only dangerous person involved in their lives. What is it with you and having people drug & take advantage of Dana. First Roxy’s friend and now Tony’s thug? Sweet Jesus! I’m really not a fan of that. I know you thrive on angst, but seriously now. Whether or not Dana remembers what happened the night before, she is going to know that something isn’t right and I have a feeling, especially knowing you as well as I do, that it’s only going to encourage her to go digging & looking for even more trouble than she can handle. You wouldn’t be you if you weren’t stirring the pot and causing more drama. The whole thing with the dog creeped me out. A few chapters back when Dana & Alice were having their “moment” with the glass wand, they both thought they heard someone in the apartment and just assumed it was nothing and then decided it was Sharon. Not for nothing, Sharon wouldn’t have waited quietly in the living room with the two of them fucked each other six ways to Sunday. She would have broke the door down and probably accused Alice of corrupting her daughter. I think someone else was in that apartment and it was probably David. Makes the most sense, but then again, you never go for the obvious answer. Once again, you have left me on the edge of my seat.