Fan Fiction
This story has been set to a rating of PG-13. Age verification is required to proceed.
Just The Girl 2.0 – Chapter Seventeen (Based loosely on HYD: Returns)
Login to add story to favorites
(3 votes, average: 5.00 out of 5)You need to be a registered member to rate this post.
Loading ...
But.. no worries, I can always count on Bette and her potty mouth to speak up. “Holy shit!” She exclaims loudly when she notices the damage by my feet. She completely ignores my apology but that’s okay, at least she’s talking again.
Uh-oh. For the first time, I really look at what I had done. Pieces of green stone lay scattered there, decorating the floor. “It was an accident..” I say feebly, massaging the back of my neck.
“Yes, a very expensive one..” She kneels down and fingers through the debris.
I knew Bette very well, she never cared much for material things unless they had some sort of sentimental value. From the look on her face, I knew I had destroyed something special – yet again. “What was it?”
“A paperweight my dad got for me on my eleventh birthday..” She answers mechanically, her eyes staring sadly at the mess.
“I’m sorry, I’ll pay for it.” I proclaim boldly, taking out a couple of rolled bills from inside my back pocket. I still had more than enough money left from the cab ride to this place. What can I say, I’m still pretty much loaded from the waitressing job at Sakura. “How much do you think it costs?”
“You don’t have to pay.” She stands up abruptly. Not bothering to use the intercom, she yanks open her bedroom door and screams for Sonja.
“I insist.” I push. How expensive can a paperweight be? At most it’ll just be like what, fifty dollars or something?
“You don’t have to.”
“I want to. It’s a matter of principle.”
“Are you sure about that?”
“Uh-huh. So how much?”
“Roughly 25 grand.”
“…”
“Fine, if you want to pay for it, go right ahead.”
I cough and clear my throat. “S-say what again? H-how much?”
“$25,000. That’s three zeroes.” She lifts three fingers to emphasize this. Point taken, thank you very much.
“But.. but.. but.. it’s just a friggin’ rock!” I sputter out in disbelief.
“It’s not just a rock, it’s an ornamental rock.”
“It’s a paperweight!”
“It’s a jade paperweight.” She stresses.
“Your dad just probably picked it up in a mountain somewhere!”
Comments
Leave a Reply
You must be logged in to post a comment.
thanks alch!!! i think i’m getting greedy with your awesome storytelling, the more you post the more i want more!!! but i know you need time to do a follow-up to this wonderful update so i’ll try to patiently wait. my emotions are up and down, laughing and crying at the same time while reading this but for sure i was just over the moon with the update. i think good times are coming back with bette and tina playing the master and the maid and i’m sure you’ll have fun writing it so i hope you start soon! thanks again.
thanks a million for your generosity in sharing this ever surprising, moving, funny, happy sad sweet most excellente story – i should call it a novel :-) – with us! that’s our tina – stubborn and immortal weed. i love how you write her and write both characters with such balance. the next chapters will be so much fun :-) i liked your switchup, writing first person from the characters pov in this installment – it worked great. like chakakadin i’m always greedy for more – thank you for another superb ride, alch
Yay, an update; I had given up hope
wow that was heartbreaking to read,but such a brilliant post, however i loved the last page, really can’t wait for your next post with Tina being Bette’s maid (no pressure). also really loved what you did with writing it in 1st person, it really worked.Cheers for the post PPS
ahhh alch you’ve made my day!! love this story sooooo much! at last, there’s hope on the horizon and i’m glad it’s tina that’s forced this to happen, it always seems to be our bette that has to make the first move. Can’t wait to see how this is gonna play out though! oh and the “human bush” thing – proper made me chuckle…hell i think i even snorted at that!!
DAMN-you’re GOOD!! These epics are getting to be worth the wait,so what if it takes some time to finish!! I LOVED the different POV and so appropriate at this place in the tale!!And thank you for the blissful humor you lavished us with!! It did much to buffer the heartacheand now Tina as her maid?? Can it get any better??Can not wait!!
Great update as usual. Liked your writing in 1st person.. Thanks for the image of Tina in a maid’s uniform… really hot. I hope they fix things soon. Thanks for posting PPS
The master and the maid… my imagination is running wild!! Great chapter and I liked the format. I’m sad that Tina didn’t recover Eternity…I’m hoping you’ll fix that. Such funny moments amid all the turmoil. Loved it, Alchy.
God u r killing me here, How I was impatiently waiting for this update :)) and now I hope we won’t have to wait long for the next post so PLEASE PPPVVVVS
Wowser! You are the “epic-queen-of-fan fiction!” You are a rock star! These long chapters are an emotional roller coaster rides…I cried (“She gave it back”), laughed (Sam & Bette), relieved (Jill’s confession), anger (Kate’s timing turning up at the park), sadness (no return of eternity), and roared with laughter (dreaming of porn…My Tina). You are an incredible writer!!!! Ok…we’ve hung on to the drama…please some lightness and “combative” fun that these 2 capture on paper. Rock on Alchy!!!!
Oh, that was good. My heart was hurting most of this post, but in the end some of the pain was relieved.
Way hilarious but not missing on dramatic moments too. And must say, Bettes new maid is a little rough around the edges. LOL
i always feel after reading one of your posts, that i just read a really good book and i can’t wait for the sequel!!!
I knew Jill had the hots for Bette, don’t what she’ll do but I hope her crush fades, like Sam told her. That scene with Kate and “accidental jogger” was too funny. Maybe we can hook Kate and Jill up? Just a suggestion, well more like a request LOL. Love it Alch.
I savored this over 2 wonderful days, I don’t like waiting for more updates just so you know. I will though, wait that is because that’s all I can do, sit and wait, and wait and sit. Thanks for the update it’s something wonderful to look forward to, and now this twist….hmm delicious to read I’m sure!!
So, Tina is the maid! Can’t wait to see how this plays out in the next chapters! PPS
Hey girl. Glad you are back and with a big one. Many emotions during the reading but the last one is anticipation. We need you back soon… :) Thanks for the incredible story. Kisses
That was awesome, the drunk Bette is funny and crazy and scary too lol. Hope she and Tina will sit down and talk and work thing out but now let see some maid and master here lol. I think jill and kate should hook up and they can stay out of B&T’s life. Please post more, thanks!